Can you proof read this, take out any duplicating or anything that seems to be o

Can you proof read this, take out any duplicating or anything that seems to be over stated. I only need this to be 10 pages, so there is a lot of room for deleting information. Also, can you add in any place you feel there should be a reference added, or a sitation added. No need to fill in the actually siting, just note where there should be a cited spot. Thank you